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I have discovered a new kind of heartbreak.
Who'd have thought there could be one more.
The pain caused will require
all the human senses to feel,
And cannot be healed.
A new experience
I didn't know it was possible
for you to hurt me in so many ways.
Should have learned from my mistakes
but I can't move on
no matter how hard I try.


I see your silhouette
Black against a blood red sky
The silver moon glowing behind
your head like a halo
But as I move position
I see you from a different perspective
You're silver and translucent
Reflecting the light from the moon
And as the moon hides behind clouds
you disappear.


The way you looked at me...that piercing glare
of hatred that turned me to stone
I can literally smell the hatred on your clothes
Like smoke,
Radiating from your body like the light
given off from your golden hair.


You spoke to me, my ears bled
All those hurtful things you said
You cut my heart open with your dagger tongue
...and rubbed salt into the wound
Your poison words have left me
Crying quietly as I slowly turn cold
But you don't care. My soul you sold.
As the lights fade I scream silently
My heart beating violently.
But I know these words will touch you
You'll never get the blood off your hands.
They've been infected with what you injected.
Your gloves stained red.
You act confused but it all makes sense,
Your bruised fists clenched.
Something clicks like
a trigger in your head
Now you're lying on your bed...
...Crying on your bed...


And you said maybe
Well maybe that's not good enough
Maybe you're not good enough
I know I can do better
So why am I still here
Gazing at your letter?
I know I shouldn't love you...
...but I do.
And there's nothing anyone
can do to change this.
You really have a hold on me
I'm in this cage now...I'll never be free



I guess I'm just a prisoner
of the web you spun...

Please let me go

A helpless fly caught up
in that web you spun...

The web you spun for me.



And my heart will eternally
Bleed internally.
The full title of this deviation is 'Sensual Heartbreak (Internal Bleeding of the Heart)', but it would not all fit in the Title box. This poem probably needs editing, but I put it up as something for you to read while I find other poetry I have written, and write new material.

Like a lot of teenage poetry, this was written about a certain girl (and I don't mean to be sexist here but they have a tendancy of making you feel like absolute shit everytime you love one.)
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Vespillo-Cruentus Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
wow...this is really good
the scary thing is i know a blonde girl like that..i sort of half have a crush on her.. :/
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chrissymash Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2008
Wow, I relate to this soo much, you've captured it so well, they way you write made me think I was re living those painful times. Thats a good skill to have :-)
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xsaltinmywoundx Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2008
Thankyou for the kind words :) really glad you could relate to it!
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conversegirl022 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2007
i love this poem its beautifull
i find it quite unique when male poets write about heartbreak really shows perspective on how its not always men :)
i love it faving :D
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fallenstar Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this a lot...I can relate to it in a way, although I must say, certain boys are perfectly capable of making us girls feel like shit too.
Lovely work dear :blackrose:
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dorky-becca Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
wow thats good!! i love it!! i can relate to it wow go you!!!
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xsaltinmywoundx Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
Merci beaucoup!! :) :hug:
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dorky-becca Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005
its okay:glomp:
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Muki-chan Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2005
This is really good. You capture the emotion wonderfully.

I'm going on an angst spree, and seemingly, writing my own poetry about this subject wasn't good enough. That's how I found this.
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xsaltinmywoundx Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2005
Thankyou so much for taking the time to read this and to comment on it, you really don't know how much I appreciate it :)

How come writing your own poetry about this wasn't good enough?
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Muki-chan Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2005
I dunno. I generally tend to take an emotion and wallow in it for awhile before I feel like I'm satisfied.
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XcrimsonangelX Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2005
wow. you're very talented. That's one of the best poems I've read in a while.. and I tend to read quite a bit of poetry. I'm just amazed by your poem.
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xsaltinmywoundx Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2005
I'm flattered...thankyou :)
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Autonumber Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2004   Writer
Wow. It's really descriptive, so much so that I sorta forget what it's about sometimes. But then you don't really need the plot when you just get the raw emotion and beautiful imagery. Some of the rhymes were a bit cringe-worthy though. I like the way the lines are long enough for the rhythm to sound wondering and relaxed.
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kasubi Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2004
dear god.. this is the most beautiful and heartfelt/broken thing i have ever read....
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Faintest-whisper Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2004
Like I told you, amazing. No wait -fucking awesome! best poetry I've read in ages in fact, we should do a collaboration! I'll speak to you later my little genius xxxxxx
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xsaltinmywoundx Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2004
Awww shucks! I like the idea of a collaboration, let's talk some more about that :)
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innocent-child Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2004
omg heeenry!! i didnt know you had all this in you. jeez.ur good. v. good.
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xsaltinmywoundx Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2004
You don't have to say that just to be nice you know :p
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innocent-child Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2004
im not just saying it to be nice!! its lush and i want it on my wall in my bedrrrroom
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